no more homeless

[FallenStar]

Hi everyone
I am new here..and i am really feeling shy to post my poem after i read so amazing poems here..there r real talent ppl here..and this is my very first poem...tell me if it is nice..will mean a lot to me to hear ur comments about it

You have been walking in this world alone..

in search of something would make you feel whole..



people around you have cold faces..

everyone busy running their own races



your there and your place is called nowhere

just walking with hope that this road leads somewhere



at nights..you tell your pillow how your heart is heavy from emptiness..

coz you don't want to belong to what they call adultness



glowing dreams and skyscraping desires..flying over us..

controlling us ..molding us..shaping us..



it's time to give me your hand

with you I’ll share my own land



no you won't be alone again

coz I will take all of your pain



no more feeling homeless

coz my heart will beat for you endless



I will let my love shine over you

lighting every dark road for you



like the wind you can't see but you can feel

look in my eyes and see how my love is real



give me your hand and surrender all your sorrows to me..

let your heart and soul follow me



I will be your port of peace

come arrive your ships, put them at ease.



the world becomes silent when we are together

want to keep you in my arms forever



rain stopped falling, left the sand numb with a scent

and tears finally will stop while happiness descents



rain stopped falling, left the sand numb with a scent

and tears finally will stop while happiness descents

- By Me for my Prince

[Iron Man]

fallen star

we're honoured with your presence among us

you're so talented at writing poems

your poem touched my heart

and I wish my girl could write such romantic poems dedicated to me

but unfortunately she just writes in German loool

fallen star from now on let me call you the rising star in roro sky

and thanks for sharing

regards

[cute rose]

nice

thankx a milllion

[FallenStar]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Iron Man

fallen star

we're honoured with your presence among us

you're so talented at writing poems

your poem touched my heart

and I wish my girl could write such romantic poems dedicated to me

but unfortunately she just writes in German loool

fallen star from now on let me call you the rising star in roro sky

and thanks for sharing

regards

Thanx alot Iron Man for ur welcoming..i am really happy u liked it..ur comment makes me more happy..
ur girl write in German ?? WOW..i am sure she write nice things..^_^..
u changed the meaning of my name..but feel free to call me wat u like ^_^

[FallenStar]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة cute rose

nice

thankx a milllion

Thanx for u a lot..^_^

[Little Cat]

Yay, very nice poem, you're talented indeed. The two lines that made me stop for a while and contemplate were the one saying he's there but his place is nowhere, which is kind of philosophy if we work our minds for a moment, it made me think of the many contradictions we live, and I think it inspires me to write few verses about that, if you don't mind of course.
The second line that amazed me as well was the one talking of having a heart heavy with emptiness, and that as we all know is in the scientific point of view is incorrect, but it's still true; emptiness is heavy indeed and here we can find another contradiction that all humans live.

I think you've got the talent, all you need to do is keep it burning by writing. Don't force words to make musical rhymes, just let the words come from the heart.

Thank you for sharing this, hope to read more written by you

[FallenStar]

thanx very much little cat..i am happy u like it..and thank u for ur golden advice..u know that i was too aware for the words and i was forcing them to come in rhyme ..and u noticed that with ur experienced eye..thanx for ur encouragement..means a lot to me