Al mirage

[queen luv]

I'm lost; leaking wisdom, loosing insight; suffering inflicted its sequels on my strained body, torn cloth covered with a long time misery, looking for a real 'you' as a precious thing, in a time when things have no substance, only bare definitions and perished values, in a very long second I was clashing within myself, a decent winds creak passed by my ears, politely telling me ..What you're chasing is just a mirage of the loneliness.
At the very first I thought I got hold of your goodness that could lighten my eyes, crying tears like a holy ink writing facts on my destiny's paper, thus, I went too far with my imaginary to a place in tomorrow when there's no light but your hair darkness, depending on your insights, stronger than your eyes to light our way , now angels on my shoulders are confused to write this sin down or just pass up through it, because I went beyond my faith when I thought of you like a queen of innocence ,a piece of heaven, or a bless from above.
when I thought you are not a human ,coming from a fiction story written by a magica liquid hidden within unknown world, I went too far when I thought you are not real, because you can't be real, your existence is a Miracle in a time of no-more-Miracles, an old man sat next to me standing over the last moments, put his hand on my shoulder telling me ,what you are chasing son is just a mirage of perfection.
as yet I can’t stop grieving, searching and passing up through a very low whispers emitted from the remaining thoughts of mine ,telling me 'enough' what you've been chasing all this time is just another mirage, a mirage of hope ..

[queen luv]

i have to cahge the name to ALmirage

[Little Cat]

Hello mate,

I felt like being lost through the words, they seemed wise indeed. If what you were speaking of was Love then I can shorten the whole idea with: Love is blind.

I can't say more at the moment because I'm not able to focus, I'll change the title to the one you suggested just as you wished.

Peace

[Last Fantasy]

cooooooool i decided to keep it in mind and send it to my love as the most beautiful massage in the world

[queen luv]

llittel cat first thanx

[queen luv]

last fantasy thanx cos u sheard me up an i was soFrustrating because i thought no one like it

[Little Cat]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة queen luv

last fantasy thanx cos u sheard me up an i was soFrustrating because i thought no one like it

My earlier comment meant I liked what I read, I think I wasn't so clear.
I trust the others will love your topic, they're just a little busy nowadays, I think they'll be commenting later.

I forgot to thank you for the topic, I'm sorry. Thank you very much and stay in touch

Salam

[بسـ الطفـε(｡◕‿◕｡)зـوله ــمة]

First

welcome to the forums brother , I hope that u enjoy ur stay with us

Back to the topic.........

Your poem is beautiful , even though , I got lost as well at the beginning
, but the end was not satisfying , for me!

I hoped for a nice and cute ending , l
like him finding his true love and that it does exist

I hope there is a second part to this poem^_^


just try to hit enter after every stanza u write , if u are going to write next time ^_^

thanks for sharing this nice piece

regards

[queen luv]

thanx basma an i will ensha2alla