Decay o_o

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hello members


I know it has been along longggg time since my last poem

Hope u like this one
and if u don't , criticize me plz in a constructive way not destructive

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DECAY

Hello . is anyone there ?

A freaky silence interrupted .

What a chilling night mare .

That made his mind corrupted

The devil he managed to scare ,

In the alleys of darkness has vanished

A deadly sin inside him , he can no longer bear


Few years has passed......

Alone again . the strength he had ,

vanished .weakness replaced it;s place

the breeze of emptiness penetrating his inside

the consequences of yesterday he has to face

His strength has faded , he couldn't fight

the soul of him has integrated in another phase

happiness was no longer by his side

he Wasted his life for all these days

for the abused life hood he has cried

His road of faith has become a never ending maze

" But I never had a guide " ....xx

his pleading echos were lost with no trace

there is no place to hide

or death or life in his case

That is a punishment for the spirit which has lied

So his soul is decaying forever

This heavy burden , he has to face

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[Little Cat]

Hey, I had a look at the poem and I liked it, but I'll be back with a clear mind later to tell you what I liked most, why and how..

Thank you for sharing the poem Mariam

[! طيف ابتسامة !]

happiness was no longer by his side

Mariam

What a beautiful poem

Thank you for sharing

Regards

[Hamza23]

i like the poem like always

but wait what is the theme??

loool i didnt really get it by the end

[Little Cat]

Hello again,
First of all, I had to read the poem so many times to focus, but I still find thoughts not well related, maybe your attention was on rhyming, not meanings. The best word to describe the poem is "mysterious" and I found that in every line I've read.

I don't know who you mean by "He" and "Him", but I think he must be someone from your imagination, and now I've created his picture in mine, I imagine him as a lost man with a dark past that he wasn't able to change or forget. He's weak and sad, and winter is living in him. The guy doesn't put the blame on him because you mentioned "I never had a guide" so maybe he's an enemy of Fate, but the thought is still not that convincing because it contradicts with what you mentioned earlier.

The poem is good, I liked it.

Well done Mariam, keep writing

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اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ! طيف ابتسامة ! [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل]
happiness was no longer by his side

Mariam

What a beautiful poem

Thank you for sharing

Regards

i
I am glad that u liked it
thank u siister for passing by
Cheers

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اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Hamza23 [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل]
i like the poem like always

but wait what is the theme??

loool i didnt really get it by the end

thank u hamooza

well I was supposed to tell u the story

this poem is about someone who thinks he z powerfull and no one can stand in his way !
he believed that he was so powerful , his ideas made him a Kafir!

in the end he realizes that there is indeed someone most powerful < God

but it was too late



thank u for passing by

[queen luv]

i just wanna say
me sooo love it