My heart , don't scream

[اميرة الاحلام]

My heart don't scream
I never knew that love
is slow death
Nobody told me to be
a doll without passion
without feelings
If I knew I would have scattered
my heart
Sleep little doll
Don't cry
Only me will hear your
tears falling like a stream
from your lovely eyes
You are me
Our fantacy won't come true

[فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل] [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل] [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل] [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل]/

Written by me

[Little Cat]

Well, it's a sad piece, I can feel the sense of isolation in every line.

Telling a heart not to scream tells of a recent heart break, so it's a good way to give a sense of what the poem is all about from the first line, and reading the second line we find ourselves heading to the next thought which now speaks of Love; and calling love "slow death" clarifies how the writer had a long journey with suffering from the feeling.

For the next few lines, I disagree with you because fear can't be enough to make you scatter your heart, simply because there's no way for you to make it possible.

Supposing you made it true, and broke your heart, you called yourself a doll, and that gives a cold sense of what sadness gave you, and for the next final lines loneliness was covering every word.

It's a nice piece, could be better if you continue to write.

Peace

[بسـ الطفـε(｡◕‿◕｡)зـوله ــمة]

what happened to the positive and energetic tone about love?

why sinking in deep saddness when u know that love goes through ups and downs

the poem is nice and simple and shows the deep feelings of urs

but my advice for you is not to give up easily

when a door is closed another opens

so keep up ur hopes

thnaks for sharing this nice piece with us
regards

[عاشق قنص]

little cat and basswlh


there are many people writel ike this style

and they good at it

if i wrote something about sadness it means i'm sad man

prince of dreams

nice what u wrote

and keep going

[كريم مزوري]

تسلم اخي العزيز بارك الله فيك

[دموع الاصايل]

nice your poem

i like it

thank you for sharing
regards