Next To Her Shadow poem

[Little Cat]

Next To Her Shadow


Shining through the darkness
Red candles alight
Drunk trees in a storm, dancing
With the mistress of the night
Moonlight dressed like a fairy
Naked feet surrounded with chains
Dancing next to her shadow
She was swaying in the rain
Blood stained hands held up
Hands tied to the sky
'til light of day will wake up
She will dance through the night
Let the wind come to her
Let it carry away her tears
Bring the light to the world
Let it end the night she fears
The night was scary, cold, and long
A long night that lasts for years
One thousand nights and a night passed
Then her chained hands were free
Her pretty eyes no longer blind
Cause light has come, and she can see
She can dance..She can sing
Again she's alive, and she can breathe
She can taste the freedom
Oh, God. It tastes so sweet
But wait! She's still not free!
The light is still dark
Wait! I'm still not free!
Isn't this supposed to be freedom
So why my shadow is chasing me?!

Chains mean love, shadow means memory.

Written on September, 27th, 2008

[Little Cat]

Wow never thought this poem would be that useless that no-one wants to reply on it, I respect honest people so someone tell me he doesn't like and it'll be fine

[بسـ الطفـε(｡◕‿◕｡)зـوله ــمة]

It is not like that sister

the problem is we all have exams that is why the forum seems like a hunted house ^_^

I am so glad that I am the first to reply

I love poems full of descriptive language
specially the clever use of metaphor
And u made a good use of it


however , I didn't know u were describing a previous experience about love
until I read wat the chains actually are
^_^

In general I agree with u , we don't know how precious love is , until we loose it , and all the beautiful memories start chasing us :(

I hope u find the true love of ur life

Great poem sis

Regards

[Little Cat]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة بسـ الطفـε(●̮̮̃•̃)зـوله ــمة

It is not like that sister

the problem is we all have exams that is why the forum seems like a hunted house ^_^

I am so glad that I am the first to reply

I love poems full of descriptive language
specially the clever use of metaphor
And u made a good use of it


however , I didn't know u were describing a previous experience about love
until I read wat the chains actually are
^_^

In general I agree with u , we don't know how precious love is , until we loose it , and all the beautiful memories start chasing us :(

I hope u find the true love of ur life

Great poem sis

Regards

Glad you liked it, and I actually don't wish to fall in love again, I got enough and more than enough, I'm better without it..

Thanks for the comment, encouraging indeed.

Peace

[بسـ الطفـε(｡◕‿◕｡)зـوله ــمة]

I used to think like you before
but Love is just the cutest feeling ever
but there has to be problems !! always

u are 17 , I think u have the time to enjoy urself ,
let love comes later , lool as if we can decide when love!!

regards ^_^

[SECRETS~OF~LOVE]

wonderful poem
from reading the poem
u seem a sweet person
grazie for sharing this poem

[Hamza23]

what i like about ur poem is that it always mentions "she" not "i"

its more like a third person point of view

thanx for sharing this poem

[semsmm]

It is wonderful poem
Iam still swaying from these nice ,words
looooool

[Little Cat]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة SECRETS~OF~LOVE

wonderful poem
from reading the poem
u seem a sweet person
grazie for sharing this poem

Thanks, glad you liked my poem and actually I'm not that sweet but thanks anyway.

[Little Cat]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Hamza23

what i like about ur poem is that it always mentions "she" not "i"

its more like a third person point of view

thanx for sharing this poem

Thanks Duaa ^^