Sonnet: Broken heart

[Hamza23]

hi all

this is marioma's poem but i made it sonnet

cong marioma u got 97% haha for the sonnet


Broken heart

Suffering from the brutality of this world
Gasping, wanting to live
My love is dying there, where it is dark and cold
I thought I will always be there
And die when I am elderly
No real images captured in the brains
My love is dying, this truth I can't bury
All these years, what an idiot. I was sightless
My feelings for you have never elapse
My tears now like load
They are full of passion
Lies lies I hear lies. The secret I can't hold
That is why the real story has to be tell
MY love is dying, it is our slip

[Iron Man]

THANK YOU

I'll be back to comment

[Hamza23]

hehe i will be waiting

and coz u read the sonnets topic

which sonnet is this??

haha and its mariomaaaaa's poem but changed to sonnet

[دموع الاصايل]

hi hamaza

nice sonnet

thanks alot for your effort

[Hamza23]

اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة دموع الاصايل [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل]
hi hamaza

nice sonnet

thanks alot for your effort




thanx for passing by

[بسـ الطفـε(｡◕‿◕｡)зـوله ــمة]

hhhhhh

u actually made it nicer

how about if the 2 of us write poems together ^_^

I like it really nice

thank u hamooza

[Hamza23]

اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة ♥МღА♥ЯღІ♥АღМ♥ [فقط الأعضاء المسجلين والمفعلين يمكنهم رؤية الوصلات . إضغط هنا للتسجيل]
hhhhhh

u actually made it nicer

how about if the 2 of us write poems together ^_^

I like it really nice

thank u hamooza


that will be great

now i will write something and u should edit it

thanx for passin by

<ps its no longer a poem hhhh its sonnet,, coz its 14 lines,, and its Shakespearean sonnet